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Get the glue..i've come undone
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 10:23:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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i'm the shelf you place yourself upon
to gather dust and fade,
no help to save yourself a dawn
tomorrow's rust is just the same
feel the blanket dust consume,
all that's now is just a fall
as we decay in half a room,
i wish i had a soul to call
_____________________
I'm here and I'm writing!
I'm tired cause I'm fighting!
My deepest emotional wounds...
I'm an army of one!
I'm armed with no gun!
Where's a white flag to wave me...
_____________________
get the glue i've come undone
off the wall you saw me fall
now i'm just like every sun
setting slow to just a crawl
get the pills, i need to numb
everything you made me feel
i know it's wrong, i know it's dumb
but love i feel is never real...
i'm here and i'm writing!
no longer fighting...
dw
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Re: Get the glue..i've come undone
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:26:37 AM AEST
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This is a wonderful write. Really good job. I liked this stanza the most...probally cause it most sounds like me:
feel the blanket dust consume,
all that's now is just a fall
as we decay in half a room,
i wish i had a soul to call
I hope all works out |
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Re: Get the glue..i've come undone
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 12:55:33 PM AEST
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| I'm here and I'm writing ... great line .. me too; hard as it is to continue ... |
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Re: Get the glue..i've come undone
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 01:14:46 PM AEST
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good solid write , lots of emotions
keep writing
keep smiling
sweetstranger |
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Re: Get the glue..i've come undone
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 02:10:45 PM AEST
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Unique write. Yes keep writing, it is the soothing we need for our twisted minds. LOL
Several lines in particular, that caught me up: "get the glue I've come undone
off the wall you saw me fall
now I'm just like every sun
setting slow to just crawl"
"get the pills, I need to numb" been there before. Good stuff here. Peace to you. Laura |
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Re: Get the glue..i've come undone
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 05:27:03 PM AEST
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I came back for seconds .. struck by the line..
where's a white line to wave me ...
I feel like that now ...
I really like this a lot...:-( |
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