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The Lonely Mile
Contributed by
cooley1818
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Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 09:37:00 AM in AEST
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To describe a feeling
that cannot be defined
is like chasing a dream
and falling behind
this feeling of being lonely
when im really never alone
but still i tend to seek
the lonley mile i'll roam
I see it as the distance
that remains from you and me
the lonely mile i'll travel
the only mile i see
i'll prevent happiness
with lies and deciet
but the lonely mile will help me find
the love i'll never meet
the lonely mile describes
the pain of being alone
but will show you the meaning of life
and all the emotions known
the experience may be difficult
with all the obsticals you will meet
but the lonely mile will take you
far beyond defeat
whats the words to describe it
what feelings will you feel
the lonely mile will make you believe
your imagination is real
what does the phrase mean?
its just a message you try to send
its a phase that goes on forever
its a phase that will never end
maybe one day you will hear
all the stories that are told
maybe one day you will walk
down the lonely mile road
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by Beni on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 10:04:31 AM AEST (User
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This poem is a great write and i can really feel the emotions put forward. Well done.
Rebexa
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:22:39 AM AEST (User
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Wow, i thought this was extremely well written! the rhymes that you put together.. along with how you worded it phonetically was very, very thoughtful.. such as your lines:
the lonely mile describes
the pain of being alone
but will show you the meaning of life
and all the emotions known
great material and emotions!
keep up the fine writing
dw |
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 12:57:15 PM AEST (User
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4 line breaks would make it easier to read and make it stronger |
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 01:22:58 PM AEST (User
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very good write of despair and loneliness
keep up the good work
keep writing
keep smiling
sweetstranger |
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 03:18:44 PM AEST (User
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A very good poem, crawled deep into my heart. SLipSiX. |
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by Naughtygurl on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 03:34:12 PM AEST (User
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theres one thing i dont like and thats when ppl try to tell you wut they "think" will help ur poetry if they dont like it dont read its fine i loved this poem , expecially when you should me it so ya its good and i dont think it could get better ... i know its probably just constructive critisism or w/e but still like this poem its great
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Re: The Lonely Mile
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Monday, 1st August 2011 @ 02:16:06 AM AEST (User
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What more can I say?
Your writing is beautiful and original and should stay as is. |
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