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My life, my love.. and my trying.
Contributed by
In_a_while
on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 11:02:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Some time spent alone
with my demons and dirt
will free me from home
for whatever it's worth
Skulls and my hate
flash through her face
i'm afraid of my fate
that i won't have a place
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In the world.. in this garden
In the rain.. in this tear
I'm a bird in the burden of words...
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In time, i'll drop the leaves that i carry
and wander from God and the wait
i'll find heart shaped stones to bury
'cause to life i can never relate
she said she's just waiting to live
so i paused to describe how i'm dying
i wonder if i could ever really give
my life, my love and my trying
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In the memory.. in this moment
In the poem... in this cage
I'm a bird in the burden of words.
dw
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Re: My life, my love.. and my trying.
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:09:22 PM AEST
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| A bird in the burden of words .. hmmm; making me think. |
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Re: My life, my love.. and my trying.
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:11:50 PM AEST
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A beautiful poem, which seems to relate to one's worthyness or adequacy. Seems to deal with guilt or self doubt with some trouble relating to it all. Vulnerability. Perhaps trapped by the limitations of language to express myself?
Well done
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Re: My life, my love.. and my trying.
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 05:05:49 PM AEST
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| i like the concept and you said alot of great things here...it was very well written! keep up the good work! |
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Re: My life, my love.. and my trying.
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 05:24:46 PM AEST
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This is a wonderful write Dwayne...You may be struggling at the moment, but surely you will come out on top. The format and your words suit this emotive piece...Well done. This had a strong beginning and ending.
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