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Shaving Ryan’s Privates
Contributed by
lancaster
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Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:56:35 PM in AEST
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If this was the inverse
What comes second
Should have really come first
A last drink to never quench your thirst
One more stroke of her hand
Before you finally burst
If this was remotely fair
All this stress
Would add lusciousness to my graying hair
Would set me apart
Beyond compare
Like a true work of art
When you can’t help but stop and stare
If this were the age
Of fast cars and roller-skates
Drive in movies and Watergates
Stickball and soul mates
Filthy ten dollars worth
Of a shady nickel bag
Seeds collect like dirt
Exhale to release the hurt
If there was a moral
At the very least a solvent point
A diagram of disorder
Dismembered at the throat
Stimulation of the libido
Pointless games
A face held incognito
Puff and pass the joint
If this were a mockery
What do you call what you wrote
Gibberish sitting next to me
Leave it to you to tell a bad joke
Constantly bombarded
My vision retarded
Here you go, have the last toke
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Re: Shaving Ryan’s Privates
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 11:44:04 PM AEST
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LOL the title gave me a laugh...it sounds like a bad porno ; )
I did enjoy reading the poem though...I like the imagery it was giving me, especially the third stanza. Nice job!
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Re: Shaving Ryan’s Privates
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by twobabies on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 08:21:02 AM AEST
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| The title didn't go along with the poem but I thought it was hilarious. Is it the weed that brings out your creative side or do u not smoke at all? It doesn't matter either way I thought the poem was great. |
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Re: Shaving Ryan’s Privates
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by Alibi on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 02:52:17 PM AEST
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| Some lovely sentiments in this poem, and some obvious sarcastic humor. Not sure what the title has to do with the actual write, but it gave me a giggle either way :) |
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Re: Shaving Ryan’s Privates
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 12:40:25 AM AEST
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| awww .. i wanted to read about .. never mind. lol |
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Re: Shaving Ryan’s Privates
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 08:01:07 PM AEST
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pass that bone over here will ya??
lol
last stanza's best...
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