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life is a bus
Contributed by
CharCoal69
on
Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 02:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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i'm on a bus.
to nowhere
in particular.
just me
and 300 girls.
every one
loves me more than the last.
and i sit on this bus
reading my newspaper
blind to their desires.
one comes closer.
"hi." she says,
nervously.
"the Leafs lost again." i declare.
and she goes back to her seat.
and i sit there, feeling indifferent.
the saddest part?
this bus ride won't end
until each one does the same.
but it's just a bus ride
isn't it?
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CharCoal69
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2003-01-12 14:00:00]
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Re: life is a bus
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by roisin on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 03:50:41 AM AEST
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| yes, life poetry...thought it bit of a giggle...ta... rosie |
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Re: life is a bus
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 12:33:35 PM AEST
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| 300 girls, huh? Sounds more like the life of a travelling porn star. I found this poem to be both arrogant and dominated by overly male-chauvinist attitudes. Thanks. |
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Re: life is a bus
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by CharCoal69 on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 03:43:31 PM AEST
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The 300 girls was a representation of all the girls I'll meet in my lifetime.
If you didn't interpret the poem the way it was intended to be read, that's fine. |
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Re: life is a bus
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 04:41:41 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC, Charcoal...I thought this was an interesting analogy of life... well thought out too... Hope to see many more..
Jenni |
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Re: life is a bus
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Tuesday, 14th January 2003 @ 11:27:10 AM AEST
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| You also basically said that you didn't/wouldn't care about a single one of them, and, given the chance, would ignore each and every one. Seems a bit impolite at the very least. |
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Re: life is a bus
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by CharCoal69 on
Tuesday, 14th January 2003 @ 05:53:20 PM AEST
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| It's not me ignoring them, it's me being too stupid to realize that they're interested. Like I'm missing out on 300 chances to be with them, do you know what I mean? |
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Re: life is a bus
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 12:07:02 PM AEST
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| My apologies. I seem to have missed the boat on this one. What threw me off was your mention of feeling "indifferent", as if you didn't really care about your situation, and also that it seemed you were saying you knew up front that each loved you more than the last. I didn't realize you were only mentioning it as a fact of the matter that you were oblivious to. Again, I am sorry. |
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Re: life is a bus
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by CharCoal69 on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 03:22:50 PM AEST
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| Don't worry about it. Poetry is all about interpretations.. |
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Re: life is a bus
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by mckayla on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 03:29:33 PM AEST
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I thought this poem was good. IF there were only 20 girls on the bus it must of felt like 300!!!yap,yap yap!!
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