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Rat Race
Contributed by
CarolinaBlue
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Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 08:10:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 08:21:20 PM AEST (User
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I can so relate to this. Nicely done
Michelle |
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 09:34:52 PM AEST (User
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Oh yeah I can relate to your angst.
I feel this all the time but sometimes we just have to stop for a moment and magic can be found in life.
Honest and moving piece.
Well done, I liked it |
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 09:51:47 PM AEST (User
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Oh, I can relate to this...work....*groan*
I like the format you wrote this in, with the appropriate italics, and I thought your expression was well formed also...I personally wouldn't change a thing. The picture suits this piece perfectly too, and it gave me a laugh, and....a cry....lol ; )
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:39:21 PM AEST (User
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Splendid showcase of day to day grind just trying to survive. I love the graphic. It is exactly what it feels like sometimes. You run and run and stress and stress and still come up late and needing more. It is not the big traumas in life that wear us down, it is daily life.
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by poisonpen00ad on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 01:27:20 AM AEST (User
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So very true. Great write. |
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 08:39:17 PM AEST (User
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I also love it Blue..
and feel your frustration too as well.
Personally, I would like to see a bit more,
reflecting the whole "enslaved animal" metaphor..
as this would be a most fitting write to use it in,
as we ALL are, at one time or another.
I do love it though, as is.
It's wonderful.
(the image as well)
a "New Yorker Magazine" feel to it..
Billy
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Re: Rat Race
(User Rating: 1 ) by priss on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 09:46:46 PM AEST (User
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how terrible it is to be on the inside looking out and unable to do anything about it. how do we keep from growing weary when everyday its the exact same process? i absolutely love this poem. nice! |
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