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Shot in the Eye
Contributed by
mangos
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Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 06:12:08 PM in AEST
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Take me apart
And recycle my organs
Into the pits of desperation
Where hope is only a faint idea
Truisms that fail to relate
To the desires of the common thread
A precipice etched in stone
Outlines of chiseled features close to dead
Only on the rare occasion
Does a heart speak so fluid
Do tonsils fill a trachea
With chords of pristine music
Nothing unavailable
Resources scattered to edges and limits
All is preventable
The avalanche stood still before it plummets
Before our time ends
The target makes its way to the bullet
With your finger cocked
Why are you waiting, why not just pull it?
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Re: Shot in the Eye
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 06:42:57 PM AEST
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Hmmm...I think this is meant to be viewed ambiguous at best, and negative or even angry at worst. I however see it as a very positive piece, full of hope and even anxiousness...I love your use of symbolism in this piece, and how carefully you worded your thoughts...Well done: )
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Re: Shot in the Eye
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:37:11 AM AEST
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