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Untwist Tightly
Contributed by
BlindRomantic
on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:53:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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What was full is now empty
As dirty became clean
This bare floor covered
With everything unseen.
The naked eye won’t spot
These troubles in my heart
A soul crumbling away
Along with every stable part.
Tears streaming as blood
Down this stainless breast
An unbreakable love
Shattered like the rest.
Voices whispering
When no one is around
Crowded in an empty room
Never to be found.
All around me, I hear you
And embrace my fate
A deadly life
Ended with loving hate.
Copyright ©
BlindRomantic
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2005-08-01 01:53:42]
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Re: Untwist Tightly
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by lil_angel on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 02:56:57 AM AEST
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| Wow the imergery in this poem are beyond words! Great job! You are a very talented writer. |
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Re: Untwist Tightly
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 05:04:36 AM AEST
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This is everything i have attempted to express...yet never in light years as articulate as this.
The paradoxical nature of this...thought provoking...mesmerising.
I truly adore this piece...and will find it difficult to forget. |
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Re: Untwist Tightly
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by vibes2go on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:41:26 PM AEST
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| "ended with loving hate" ... yeppers.. know that ..I do I do.. |
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Re: Untwist Tightly
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by XxNights_ChildxX on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:19:47 PM AEST
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wow this is such an amazing poem... it moved me thats for sure!! excellent write!!
Jenni xxoo |
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