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Your Eyes
Contributed by
Dusty
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Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 12:19:13 AM in AEST
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I can see in your eyes the pain that you're feeling,
The frustration and sorrow that's sent you reeling,
Your words are like blows thrown into the air,
Trying hard to disguise your rage for despair,
Though you are wanting to hide behind lies,
Nothing speaks louder than the look in your eyes,
I ache inside watching as you rant and you rave,
Unsure of myself and how to behave,
I struggle to speak and break through your walls,
But, nothing comes out, no words at all,
I'd die just to hold you, make it all go away,
Give anything to find the right something to say,
Then you walk out without looking back,
Making me regret, the courage I lack,
Tears fill my eyes, stinging and hot,
I knew I had blown the first and last shot,
As you silently pleaded for someone to see,
You just didn't realize, that someone was me.
Copyright ©
Dusty
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2005-08-01 00:19:13]
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Re: Your Eyes
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 12:29:05 AM AEST
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| how sad! this poem flows so nicely though! i enjoyed reading it and can defitnetly relate to it. great job! |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by sarankrish on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:24:18 AM AEST
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| Absolutely Good ... !!! |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by vibes2go on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:49:40 AM AEST
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| even though I'm heaped in self pity and .. yeah like that.. this was a great read.. |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by colmaster on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:57:16 PM AEST
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| Exellent! Impressive.Every part of your poem makes sense."collins" |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by XxNights_ChildxX on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:32:30 PM AEST
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OMG*loves poem* it is soooo amazing*does a dance* wow this one is great!!! i love it so much:D!! the ending was phenomenal as well, great poem!!
Jenni xxoo |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by Kitty06 on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 02:01:23 PM AEST
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| The rhythm of this poem is so disheartening and perfect for this poem. The line 'Then you walk out without looking back' really gives the poem a new level of regret and sadness. A beautiful write. |
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Re: Your Eyes
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by Fluffhead on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 02:19:18 AM AEST
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| I love it! It flowed great I hope to read more! : ) |
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