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Insomnia
Contributed by
merry
on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 09:38:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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Words welded against the skyline
Rip the sun from behind clouds
Forcing thoughts to fall like rain
Evening enters dressed for the occasion
Her soft purple skirts billowing behind her
Erasing the heat of the day
Sensuous steps meant to seduce
She refreshes and strokes the senses
Promising sleep without dreams
But the hammer of restlessness pounds
Relentless beating of heart and mind
Clock ticks without thinking
While the solemn moon looks down
Offering cool advice and condolences
Bed becomes a prison for the soul
Contemplating each daily sin and vice
Considering tomorrows chores again
What torture is this visited nightly….
Insomnia
Copyright ©
merry
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2005-07-31 09:38:26]
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Re: Insomnia
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by Naughtygurl on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 10:41:16 AM AEST
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its a good write just never read anything like it so to me its new , i'll read more of your poems someother time
~~Britt |
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Re: Insomnia
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by Asthenia on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 11:26:04 AM AEST
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| this was a very good write, everything was described so vividlty. I've been going through a bit of insomnia this week myself so this immediately grabbed my attention...hope you'll find quick rest, keep up the great writing. |
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Re: Insomnia
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by bethie on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:04:35 PM AEST
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| Very good. |
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Re: Insomnia
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by bernard2 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:20:45 PM AEST
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| Great Poem. welcome to the insomniac club. I too am an allnighter and my best works are written about three in the mornings.bernard2 |
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Re: Insomnia
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by Dusty on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 04:13:05 PM AEST
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Insomnia SUCKS. Fortunately, your writing does not! Cool write.
Dusty |
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Re: Insomnia
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by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 08:09:10 AM AEST
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My God Gaille....this is perfection. I felt each word and yes, this is exactly what it's like to lay in bed wishing for sleep but knowing it's going to be a long night of roaming thoughts of " what might have beens".
Very well done
Roses at my daisies feet
Larry
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