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you
Contributed by
dark-one
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Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:30:08 AM in AEST
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You are evil,
you are hatrid,
you represent all that is ungood.
You poke,
you scold,
you laugh at what you do not understand.
You attempt,
with every breath,
but your knife is dull.
you are relentless!
You yell, you torment!
but i am stronger for it!
I loathe you, with all that i am!
but in the end, i am me because of you.
i strive to be what you are not,
and for that, i am well, but dying.
you believe that i am wrong,
i am right, because of your wrong.
But i will not make your mistake,
for i understand that which you shun.
Thank you! for being you, so that i may be me!
In the end, there is only one hope
one chance to stop, no! not stop! to CORRECT
the calice sore that shields you mind
and grows ever larger
is it Love?
no
is it trust?
to hell with it
then....what is it?
You know the answer......but you deny it
search....and it's there.....but never let go of yourself,
or i will be lost.
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dark-one
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2005-07-30 02:30:08]
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Re: you
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:48:52 AM AEST
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hmm very intense and angry.
gives you a big hug
well done on the write. |
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Re: you
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by vibes2go on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 03:52:25 AM AEST
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but never let go of yourself,
or i will be lost.
great line!!!!! |
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Re: you
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by Kie-Kie on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 04:33:45 AM AEST
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Wow... I can just feel the anger in the poem... it seemed to leap off the moniter at me...
I do hope things start looking up for you... you can alway come to me if you need someone
Great writing
Love ya,
~Kiela~
(who hates to see people go through this) |
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by PuppyChow on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 10:59:26 AM AEST
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wow. i like!!!
good job. i like how it flows and yet doesnt rhyme. those poems seem to be getting rarer, so its fun to come across them. keep this writing alive!!! and keep it up, too. it was very good. |
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Re: you
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by CarolinaBlue on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 07:01:10 PM AEST
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This was intense and angry, I liked it alot, the whole concept and the way you laid it on the page really throws it to the reader. Your last line brings everything together and for many is the truth. Nice job!
~Blue~ |
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