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Inside out
Contributed by
smilez101
on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 10:10:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Some times i feel as though people just dont care
i have left this page blank 4 a long time
not letting u get the chance to get 2 know me
lately it's been like whateva to me
don't get me wrong
i love life
but y does it feel as though reality hits me so hard
i have been through a lot and i try 2 keep a smile on my face
but if i did i would be cheating u again
because now all i can do is frown
so y hide the truth
will it make u feel betta if i was to hide within the shadows
and if i was to
would u come find me
embrace me and let me know that things will be betta
for you and for me
it's not easy to move on so quickly
when u have been livin a lie
for all of your life
i hate myself for not bein real with you
late at night i cry myself to sleep
thinking about the man that neva gave me a try
i try 2 pick out the odds and ends
to this no win scenario
i cant keep makin up excuses for him
trying to find the best reason
for why he had 2 leave
for y he neva calls
for why he doesn't care
and the only conclusion that i can make
is that there is something is wrong with me
nobody knows the real me
i'm suspose to be this tough gurl
but i'm really as delicated as a rose
whos petals are running out
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2005-07-29 22:10:10]
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Re: Inside out
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by je2ica3 on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 10:28:07 PM AEST
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| good write |
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Re: Inside out
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 10:31:03 PM AEST
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| i think one of the important aspects of poetry is something you left out, professionalism. i think that using capitalization, punctuation, not short cutting words, using correct grammar, and taking more time on your poem in creating it to be the best, would really show as to how good of a writer you are. after all...only so much talent can show through words. |
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Re: Inside out
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by Vampire_Slander on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 11:17:31 PM AEST
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| Very good write |
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Re: Inside out
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by Sinned on
Monday, 18th January 2010 @ 06:39:00 PM AEST
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The comment above was ment to help you I hope you take that advice in.
You have a good knack for writing and your emotions and feelings come through strong.
You are special keep writing and you will get to know the inside of yourself. We all have feelings one time or another that we are worthless,but truth be known there is only one of each of us making us all very special.
Please keep writing Gurl ! |
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Re: Inside out
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by Sinned on
Monday, 18th January 2010 @ 06:41:26 PM AEST
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| Sorry the comment I was speaking of is below mine. By Essen 9 |
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