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Unrequited Love
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 02:37:52 PM in AEST
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She's always loved her
With a honey gold complexion
How she longed to cradle those curves
Maybe even slide her fingers over just the right spot
Oh, the melodic moan would fill her soul
All the souls of others within earshot would gasp
But she could only gaze from afar
Admiring each sigh
A sigh always uttered while she lay at the hands of another lover
Her envy burned into heart-ache
Tears welled up in secret in mentioning her
Still she flocked with all the others for a glance at some lover's luck
The love never dies
Such a death is impossible
For although she'll always be near her
No, she cannot play guitar
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liquidsunshine
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2005-07-29 14:37:52]
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 05:31:18 PM AEST
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You had me hook, line and sinker till the very last line. I was aghast, to say the least. Then on the last line I exhaled and nearly choked laughing. This is just too funny.
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by je2ica3 on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 10:46:12 PM AEST
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| good write |
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by HOPE4ME2 on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:09:12 AM AEST
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I agree with MorningDove, this was awesome, you had my mind giong for sure. You know, don't think I would change a thing.
Blessings
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by gwenevere on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 05:26:36 AM AEST
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| This was so different.Very enjoyable, Ros |
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 06:54:04 AM AEST
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Oh I love this! So tongue-in-cheek...I really wouldn't change a thing. I think this is great. Your expression was creative to say the least, and I enjoy a well-written poem with a wonderful twist at the end, such as what you've done so poetically here! Glad to see you're inspired to write once again: )
Keep 'em coming!!
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 01:11:23 AM AEST
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Yes indeed. I also join the many that fell into a trap well set. You had me until the word before last. Well done.
Take care, and hope, for you (?) may sometime learn guitar. On second thought, if it wasn´t about you, and you showed it to who it really was about....
Well, anyhow, take care.
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Re: Unrequited Love
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by eatfresh22 on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 04:11:34 AM AEST
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Yeah, you totally had me...I was like, Chelsea!!!...but that made me laugh all the harder in the end. You're a crack up, kid.
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