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Gratified Discharge
Contributed by
Mangos
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Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 08:02:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Who ever said love was a gift
Never unwrapped the entire package
Whenever I see a child who gives
I am inclined to think that when grown up to become attractive
Wherever I may choose to roam or eventually live
I pray that I am surrounded by continuous kindness
At any corner of this earth
You are sure to find a human life worth
Saving the end of the rope
For the corpse in the dirt
Who ever said forgive and forget
Has never once been tortured by an unshakable craving
At any moment I can appear from thin air
And sneak behind you as your busy pretend working
Put my arms around you
And with a shrug an embrace not worth reciprocating
And then I am gone, gratified
Lost to a collage of clutter on the fringe of discharge
And then I am gone, gratified
Lost to a collage of clutter on the fringe of discharge
Never to return
I have found a love that I cherish from the inside
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Mangos
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Re: Gratified Discharge
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 09:42:17 PM AEST
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Not what I expected..
(lest the title.. lol)
..but after reading the first few lines,
I knew what to expect from the rest.
A great scribe, well written.
I love the two line composition..
I had a moment of thought at each-
a very clear message.. these words.
I enjoyed it very much.
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Re: Gratified Discharge
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 10:13:00 PM AEST
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I like the message in this write...there's a depth to your words that (hopefully) doesn't go undetected. I like your opening line, it drew me right in, and how very true...There is many, many layers to love, and it's not all pretty...This part stood out for me:
"Who ever said forgive and forget
Has never once been tortured by an unshakable craving..."
I can relate to that part especially well...and the ending...how wonderfully positive! Good job.
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