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A New Chapter
Contributed by
waiting_4_you
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Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 03:34:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Details dissolve
Through a downpour of tears
Memories made distant
Come new bloodshed and fears
Newest anger
Relieve my pain
Crying,Dying
In a life full of shame
Tension and lies
Broken promises so bold
Deceptions unwind
A new story untold
A past of betrayals
Never spoken before
A new chapter begins, before it can end
And all of your lies become more
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waiting_4_you
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2005-07-28 15:34:17]
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Re: A New Chapter
(User Rating: 1 )
by xxbreathlessx on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 03:37:47 PM AEST
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| i think this poem flows very nicely and really takes the reader through all the different stages. But i felt the last line lacked all the feeling that was shown in the lines before it. it ended kind of empty (to me). but besides that i really liked it. |
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Re: A New Chapter
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by Kie-Kie on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 03:39:06 PM AEST
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This is a great poem, you convey your emotions well... It's definately worth 5 stars :)
but the title implies that you're moving on and starting anew while the poem indicates you clearly aren't... maybe a different title would suit the poem better... just my honest opinion...
Love ya,
~Kiela~
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