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Ignoring My Touch
Contributed by
xXluckie_lynnXx
on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 09:58:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Ignoring My Touch
Can you feel me?
Can you feel my heart?
As it skips in fear
Couldn't you tell I was scared from the start?
I'm reaching for you
Because I can no longer see
My hand in yours
Do you hear me breathe?
Can't you feel me?
Feel me being abused?
You can't see me?
See how I'm always used?
My insides are hollow
Without any comfort
I need some inspiration
Because of pain I am the expert
I'm inside you
Can you hear me screaming?
Solve all my problems
Please take away my bleeding
I'm reaching...
Reaching for you...
I'm lost in side my mind
No direction of where to turn to
I'm walking in your shoes
Suffering from all your mistakes
But nothing's left of me
I'm lost without a trace
Can you feel me?
I'm waiting for the end
Please try to save me
Only you've known where I've been ..
July 27,2005
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Re: Ignoring My Touch
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 10:41:53 PM AEST
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| Finally! Someone who gets it! I love a 'bleeding and torn up inside' poem! The feeling of being used, hollow, bleeding, and forgotten are wonderfully touched upon in this poem. However I find it intriguing that there isn't necessarily the feeling of loneliness, hence the line 'Only you've known where I've been...' An excellent write! |
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Re: Ignoring My Touch
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:09:31 PM AEST
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| as far as im concerned with your description of the poem, i see no point in posting something if its not the best you could have made it. a poem is all about presentation, and from your description you already put it in bad lighting. i did read the poem and i hope it is made to be the best it can be, because every poem deserves the chance to be best if it is given the work to be so. |
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Re: Ignoring My Touch
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by TeenageDirtbag on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:32:21 PM AEST
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Omfg. I'm going to print this out k? I love it...
It reminds me so much of myself and how I was feeling at the beginning of my current relationship. x.x I was scared of being hurt again but so desperate to have someone understand me and to save me.
For some reason it also reminds me of listening to Nirvana. Ehh..I'm a freak. I read this and the first thing that came to mind was my boyfriend, but then Kurt Cobain shortly after.
I wish you all the best. |
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Re: Ignoring My Touch
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by Flex4life13 on
Sunday, 6th November 2011 @ 04:25:14 PM AEST
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| Beautiful piece, the feelings are felt throughout. |
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