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Shooting Star
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:04:05 AM in AEST
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If our little world tonight
should suddenly fall through space
in a hissing headlong flight
shriveling off it's face,
in an instant every trace
as it falls into the sun,
men and mice all as one-
Who can say but at the same
instant.. from some planet far,
a child may watch us and exclaim:
"See the pretty shooting star!"
B
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:09:22 AM AEST
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Yes wow like the song in the year 25 25
man this is awsome bill, and ain't it the thruth great iorny in the ending very unsettling, well done . . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:09:33 AM AEST
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This has a magic about it !! Captivating and romantic.
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:18:13 AM AEST
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Aww Billy, this is so beautiful!! Really captivating!!
Thanks for sharing this..
Jenni |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:23:01 AM AEST
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| ::applauds:: i love it, billy. i loved the irony of it as well. i think ill have to read this for a third time. very creative, very brilliant. so original. ::thinks shes gone on enough now:: =] |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:25:12 AM AEST
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| woa Great write! Very inspiring. -Becca- |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 01:03:29 AM AEST
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LOL I love that ending!!! Excellent abstract piece Billy...Good rhyme scheme and flow, and leaves the reader pondering the possibility. Gotta love the irony!
Scorp. |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 01:16:28 AM AEST
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Excellent Billy. I have always wondered why and how could we possibly think we are the only species on earth. Maybe another world is visualizing the same things we are. Wondering and exploring hoping to find others out there. My definition of a shooting star is a soul returning to earth. Maybe it is not our world it is always returning too?
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Asthenia on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 09:50:42 AM AEST
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ha, ironic indeed...great poem and points for originality! :)
keep it up! |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:49:49 PM AEST
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Ooooh! I like this!!
I especially love the ending.
Who know's? I believe it, I mean come on, the universe is huge and ours is the only inhabited planet? That's just silly.
Heh.
I do really love this though.
Great work,
Phil xxx |
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by Mangos on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 06:40:09 PM AEST
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haha, this was great, imagine a world where that actually happned, wow what a story.
a pleasure as always
the great MOH |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by juliette on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 07:45:48 PM AEST
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Wow!
Whoa!
Very original and thought provoking write! (and a funny image in my mind now - hehehe) Pleasant read - I needed one of those tonight!
Thanks for sharing!
juliette |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by waos on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:26:12 PM AEST
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Interesting htought and sight it evokes. To us our world is everything, but
to someone far away, gazing up into the sky, we'd mearly be a light that fades
as they make a wish. Poignant thought provoking idea.
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Re: Shooting Star
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by emystar on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 04:55:23 AM AEST
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A masterpeice!
I luv the way u just painted a beautifull picture and took us way beyond our mortal thoughts.
very good and awesome scene, not that I wanted go like that any times soon. As I live to write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by gwenevere on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 05:47:28 PM AEST
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| We may never know but it is a nice thought Billy.Loved it, Ros |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 08:44:13 PM AEST
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WoW Billy what can I say that I haven't already said before my dear friend. A brillant masterpiece written by a very talented and gifted great guy named Billy. You always capture ur subject so well. Your talent shines through the magical verses of ur work.
Hugs,
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 11:22:25 PM AEST
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Beautiful....
original and fun! |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by wizard on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 08:14:53 AM AEST
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i love tis one bro. never thought a poem about the world coming to an end would evoke a smile!
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:46:24 AM AEST
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hmm very nicely done.
i am impress |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 11:57:15 PM AEST
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Oh this poem brings to my mind such beautiful fond memories..
In the old days lol.. there was such a thing as a Drive In Theatre...
I sitting in the back seat in a green Century Buick next to my two brothers. I was just a tiny little thing...
My little sister got to sit front seat to watch the movie.. on my mothers lap.
Well... I was so small, I really could not see the big screen outside the front car window..
Oh yes, I could hear the old heavy speaker's sound next to my ears, the window part way down, where it was held to rest.
So, since I couldnt see the movie, only hear it, I watched shooting stars....
My brothers kept telling me to be quiet, they can't hear the movie. But, yes.. I loved to see those shooting stars come falling out of the dark sky.
Your poem here makes me appreciate those falling stars more now.. and also appreciate our earth.. Who knows, yes.. we could be a falling star one day ourself.
Oh my.. I can see our earth falling...
I feel like I am on the outside looking in now..
Awesome write Billy..
Tears flow here... so beautiful, so touching..
***** a child may watch us and exclaim:
"See the pretty shooting star!"
Raquel Leah ; )) |
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by brew on
Tuesday, 23rd August 2005 @ 02:39:46 PM AEST
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Well, to behonest alot of us, prob would think it was,a shootingstar.......Yet, it would be the final.! Enjoyed this write.it was short, and good anology. But yes.I would beleive it was a shooting star.......thats because, i watch the skiies, at night alot.! lol Always, a nice pleasure to read, your writes.!
Brew~ |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by candysears on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 05:16:51 PM AEST
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Very nice
God Bless! |
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Re: Shooting Star
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th August 2006 @ 08:07:51 PM AEST
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Sweets .. what an intriguing and contemplative thought-
I adore the men and mice reference-
I've often wondered what was going on, on those distant stars
upon the moment they burn out .. we always view it as so
beautiful in our sky .. but who would ever think it could be
so monumentally sad to someone else perhaps?
Our life here .. is still .. and remains always .. unwritten .. : )
magnificent in all it's provocation, hun ~
~Breezy xox
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