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Memory Fades
Contributed by
xOHsoTRAGICxx
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Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:36:49 PM in AEST
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EmotionalPoetry
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i can still remember how it used to be.
but it keeps getting harder for me to see.
i'm still trying to figure out where everything turned wrong.
i get so sick of always singing this sad song.
it seems like we just fell apart for no reason at all.
and now i don't even have anyone to catch me as i fall.
this has resulted in many nights of slitting wrists.
i am now addicted to the bloody razorblade kiss.
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xOHsoTRAGICxx
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2005-07-26 23:36:49] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Memory Fades
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:43:33 PM AEST (User
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Awww..this is so sad..but you need not do that to yourself. There are other fish in the sea!! I know it must be hard..but stay strong.
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Re: Memory Fades
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:29:02 AM AEST (User
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i think cleaning this up a bit with better punctuation and capitalization will really make this look more professional. this was short and to the point, which is good for a poem. it leaves no room for boredom. you did good rhyming as well. ill give you a bit of advice, "in the end it doesnt even matter" and things are only are important as you make them. which that last bit always what makes me or breaks me. you have talent, but i think with your writing you are ready for the next level of showing it professionally. |
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Re: Memory Fades
(User Rating: 1 ) by Brandyx7 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 12:30:00 AM AEST (User
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I sorry, that had to happen to you. I hope you feel better. |
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