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I Wanna Lie Down....For Good.
Contributed by
BabyFacedAngel2010
on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:28:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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They come,They leave.
Heartbreaks,pecies everywhere.
Abandond yet again.
You find another,seems so perfect.
But your not happy,Still missing pecies.
For hope floats in you it wont happen again.
I cant take it,I want to lie on the cold floor.
In my bed,the bottle in my hand.
Broken body at the end of the trail,outta air I feel.
Or hanging out in public for them all to see.
They hurt me.I hurt me.
I let it go on.I shouldnt be here anymore!
My crys are with more pain then guilt.
My signs are more indepth then solid.
I want to lie down.......For good.
I wanna hurt in reality.
I wanna go.away.
I want them to know I wasnt just in a phase.
I cant take it anymore,The floor's cold.
The bottles almost gone.
Im on the edge.
Its wraped around my neck all I need to do is jump!
I want to lie down....for good.
Take me....away....for good!
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Re: I Wanna Lie Down....For Good.
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:37:26 PM AEST
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Just hold on and dont give up...and gr8 write! keep it up!
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Re: I Wanna Lie Down....For Good.
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by xOHsoTRAGICxx on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:44:53 PM AEST
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| i like this poem alot. it reminds me so much of some of my writings and expierences. you're a good writer. |
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Re: I Wanna Lie Down....For Good.
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 10:24:42 PM AEST
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| Through the slightly irritating spelling and grammer stuff, this poem has good flow and feeling. The constant 'I want to lie down...for good' and talking about the floor is excellent. It helps keep the poem together while feeding new pieces of the picture to the reader. Great write. |
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