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Just One Click
Contributed by
kissofdeathxx
on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 10:23:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Just one click is all I need,
This metal "L" shaped object,
Straight to the head until I bleed,
Time to kill I won't reject.
I sit here holding the gun,
I'm losing breath,
My whole life is near done,
I've finally reached death.
Would you care enought to notice,
That I'm not here anymore,
Since you put me through all this,
It's time to close the door.
Closing all the hate,
Taking my last breath,
I'm beginning to anticipate,
As I feel the signs of death.
My hands are shaking,
As I hold the gun,
But to my life it's taking,
When will it be done.
This is the end,
Don't miss me at all,
I don't want you to pretend,
Watch as I start to fall.
Copyright ©
kissofdeathxx
... [
2005-07-26 22:23:41]
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Re: Just One Click
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by BabyFacedAngel2010 on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:06:23 PM AEST
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Thats very deep,your very good.Just rember its okay to have thoughs thaughts but no action needed ^.^ This too shall pass
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Re: Just One Click
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by Brandyx7 on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:17:37 PM AEST
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| *hugs*.. I hope this poem, is just some powerful, masterpiece you thought of.. And you don't really feel this bad... You are a great writer.. truly, I love your work. |
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Re: Just One Click
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 10:28:37 PM AEST
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| This poem leaves one wanting. I really think you could continue on from the line 'Watch as I start to fall.' Where are you falling? What are you falling onto? The cold floor rushing up like the whirlwind of a crazy life perhaps? This poem is fantastic, it has good rhythm and the rhyms aren't forced. Keep writing! |
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Re: Just One Click
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 03:24:03 PM AEST
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| Powerful writing. You really have a way with words!!! But I agree, you should write Just One Click...Part 2. I love the third verse. |
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Re: Just One Click
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by aprillie on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 07:49:54 PM AEST
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| Good flow. |
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Re: Just One Click
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 10:28:04 PM AEST
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| I really did like this poem .... ^_^ |
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