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Alone on the waves
Contributed by
In_a_while
on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 01:18:15 PM in AEST
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who's alone on the waves with me?
or are the waves too high to see
anyone else who might be lost
on the sea where just few have crossed
splashing, smashing memories
it's so hard to stay afloat
i wish i'd see the end of these
these waves against my boat
are you there? do you despair?
have you felt the need for rescue?
where's the care? the warm soft air?
i wish land was in the next view
the water sure looks nice from here
i should swim deep into my thirst
and forever feel the fear
that i might never be the first...
...alone beneath the waves.
dW
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by Brandyx7 on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 02:26:50 PM AEST
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Very good.. Excellant! I love the last few lines.. there stand out in the poem...
the water sure looks nice from here
i should swim deep into my thirst
and forever feel the fear
that i might never be the first...
...alone beneath the waves.
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by lostrelic on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 03:31:59 PM AEST
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| i love the poem i am drowning everyday and need rescue |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 03:47:09 PM AEST
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| A really good poem. Flowed nicely and full of feeling. Chris. |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by Asthenia on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 04:03:59 PM AEST
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excellent poem...i could use some rescuing myself so I guess that's why I liked these lines a lot:
"are you there? do you despair?
have you felt the need for rescue?"
keep up the great work |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by Naughtygurl on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 05:41:50 PM AEST
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I liked it , I think the ocean is wut its bout but i never am 100% sure bout anything , so i think i'd b like really sad to die in the ocean ok i guess this is nonsense anyway kool poem and i like it ... ttyl
~~Kitty ~~~ |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by tangle on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 08:52:16 PM AEST
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| If i were to drown in your sea I would not be the last. As others would read to deep into boundaries were rescue is ignored. |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by tangle on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 08:54:02 PM AEST
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| If i were to drown in your sea I would not be the last. As others would read to deep into boundaries were rescue is ignored. |
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:15:45 PM AEST
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I think every human at one time or another feels lost in the crashing waves of life. I feel we need to rescue ourselves and not wait for another to do it. No one understands our feelings of loss like we do. It is nice to see them standing on the proverbial shore waiting for us, but we have to swim into land on our own.
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Re: Alone on the waves
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 08:42:22 PM AEST
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| Wow...I like this poem so much. It's so good. All the words just mesh together so well... |
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