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Angels of Hell
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 11:57:34 AM in AEST
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I sit here
With no tears
But I am still in pain
Still sitting in the cold rain
I watch as angels come to me
They aren’t white like I thought they’d be
These angels are angels in red
I watch as they surround me in bed
These angels look me in the eye
Say that’s it time to say goodbye
I watch them and wonder what to do
They look at me and say ‘it is you we want; you’
One reaches and grabs me hand
She pulls me up and helps me stand
They tell me to follow,
Say I’ll no longer be hollow
They start to walk away
‘Follow me’ they all say
I follow them, I don’t know
Where they want me to go
They walk to a staircase
They say follow us to this place
The stairs are red and full of fire
It feels like it’s my desire
I look at the stairs with a frown
They don’t go up; they go down
I step on the metal and grab the rail
It feels liking I’m heading to jail
I follow the stairs and see fire all around
The crackling of the fire- that’s the only sound
Then I see the angels sitting near by
They smile and say ‘you just died
Welcome to fire in a well
We are the angels of Hell’
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by seci on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 12:31:09 PM AEST
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this sounds as if it was a dream. but if it was or wasn't i like it. your writing style is so amazing and creative. i can't wait to read more poems from you and i hope that more people read your poem and comment because i think it was a good poem. keep writng and i'll keep reading.
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 01:10:27 PM AEST
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this gave me chills carried me along with each word nicely written
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 03:12:13 PM AEST
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| Great poem. I loved the line; 'It feels like it's my desire' it's like he/she wants to be taken. I love your style of writing, can't wait for your next poem. xxx |
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 04:33:08 PM AEST
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very strong writing.. i was hanging on until the very end and it was just great! the imagery was right on, with excellent structure too. I think.. wait...yup... i'm a fan.
excellent writing
keep it up!
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by tangle on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 09:13:59 PM AEST
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| A poem of misfortune written with brilliant description that draws my attention. |
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Re: Angels of Hell
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 10:37:25 PM AEST
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| This is a great poem, I love the idea. However, I really feel that if you put more detail into it it could really be something impressive. Perhaps the stairs burn the character because they lead to hell. These are angels of hell, they must look like some sort of demented or grotesque monsters. Add to it, make it as frightening as the idea of 'angels of hell' sounds. |
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