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temptation
Contributed by
socialmisfit
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Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 02:17:02 AM in AEST
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killing time without a thought
nostalgic nonsense without end
ventriloquist of the heart
seize wounds of naught
babble lipped and tainted with love
thoughts of you i cannot fend
temptress of mind
obsessions of you shall cause my end
heathen of my heart
misleader of my mind
i heed your words of simple seduction
and to your evils i am blind
i can resist all but you......simple temptation
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Re: temptation
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:15:26 AM AEST
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I like the flow and simple but illustrative style. Simple eloquence is hard to find, but you've hit on a vein here. Good work.
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Re: temptation
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:32:55 AM AEST
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| I agree that it flows very well indeed.great write. |
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Re: temptation
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:11:32 PM AEST
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Well I see you've outdone yourself again: )
Wonderful expression in this piece, and a few very good lines...some darkish undertones to this write. I love the last stanza! Very good. Keep it up!!
Scorp. |
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Re: temptation
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by seci on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 04:57:40 PM AEST
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| quite simple but i really like it. your words are very different, mainly i like the grammer i suppose, keep writing. i would love to learn and read more about you in your poems |
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Re: temptation
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by seci on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 04:58:11 PM AEST
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| quite simple but i really like it. your words are very different, mainly i like the grammer i suppose, keep writing. i would love to learn and read more about you in your poems |
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Re: temptation
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by edwynne on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 06:38:40 PM AEST
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| i like it, simple ones r the best ones |
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