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Death, Love By the River
Contributed by
Doriens_Picture
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Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 12:37:45 AM in AEST
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I went to the river once
I wanted to drown my self
Where some many others have
But with my luck someone
Had gotten there before me
I had to pull her body out
Her body was cold but
She was still alive
she must have been only
For a short while
So I rescued her you can say
Her dark black hair
Covered her face So I
Moved it aside
She was very beautiful
Unnaturally fair
Almost like a doll
She would not wake up
So I just held her
So that my body would warm her
She finally opened her eyes
Then spoke and I was overwhelmed
Was there some one who wanted to die
More than I
She asked why I save her
I told her I wanted to die alone
She then said that would never happen
Which was at the time I did not know it
But she was telling the truth
Becasue ever since that day
We never left eachothers side
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by Shattered_soul on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 01:35:50 AM AEST
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Your poem is very strangly written, and this is the first ive read of yours, i too have not been on in a while a wrote one after a while, i liked your ending segment though
" She asked why I save her
I told her I wanted to die alone
She then said that would never happen
Which was at the time I did not know it
But she was telling the truth
Becasue ever since that day
We never left eachothers side"
Keep up the poems
S.S
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by paul_x_walker on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 01:38:07 AM AEST
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| nice |
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by Xsitm on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:21:18 AM AEST
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| very nice |
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 05:30:33 PM AEST
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Touching write as always best of luck to you both . . .
Ben |
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by vibes2go on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 10:24:26 PM AEST
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| I had to laugh .."with my luck someone had gotten there before me" ... sounds like my luck! nice write Dorien .. I got great pics in my mind. |
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by Mild_Tempest on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:39:21 AM AEST
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| Oh man I love this poem!! It's so good |
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Re: Death, Love By the River
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by emystar on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 03:39:25 AM AEST
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This one is a living fairy tale.
What river would that be if ya don't mind saying?
A masterpeice.
huggs,
emy
Thanks so much for sharing this. |
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