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Wasn't strong
Contributed by
starierose
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Saturday, 11th January 2003 @ 09:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I guess our relationship was not strong.
The feelings that were shared are now gone.
You were someone to me.
Then you changed, I guess I was the only one that could see.
I no longer look at you the same.
It's as if I didn't even know your name.
Each passing day inside I'm dying.
The pain is unbearable I can't stop crying.
My world has been torn apart.
The beating has stopped I have no heart.
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2003-01-11 21:00:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Wasn't strong
(User Rating: 1 ) by Poetic_Angel on
Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 12:56:44 AM AEST (User
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i like your poem. you did a good job in my opinion. it's like you were exactly on point about what i'm feeling |
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Re: Wasn't strong
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 02:20:38 AM AEST (User
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Wow.. this was sad. It ended rather abruptly, but I liked it.
'Each passing day inside I'm dying.'
That is a very strong line and something that I used to feel its not fun. Keep yer chin up and keep writing like this.
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Re: Wasn't strong
(User Rating: 1 ) by starierose on
Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 06:05:22 PM AEST (User
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Do you think that is was good or bad? It's not that I'm it's just that most of my poetry is heartache for some reason. |
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