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SUCKS
Contributed by
Lancaster
on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 10:11:16 PM in AEST
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So simple are the words that need to be said
Carnal are the touches that need to be extended
Love it briefly then discard it immediately
Give credit where credit is due
Where the earth rises and the sky drops
Materialize into a placenta
Embodying the remainder
The remnants of a pretty stranger
Voices ruminate and still linger
So logical is the equation that need be formulated
Empirical data compiled left the meaning little doubt
To where this all originated, and so I investigated
If I have told you once
Then a thousand years before
I can’t repeat the unspoken
Just to placate your fickle mood
Your bitter attitude
The way you speak to me
Cockeyed and rude
Broken and untrue
So emphatic does the hand reach across the threshold
Ecstatic at the possibility of never again being told
What to do
Or where to run
What I did
She had also done
Straighten up
The hunch back forces down
Curvature in the vertebrae
The spine column
With orange cones around the slalom
Make one wrong move
And spin the vessel
Capsized in a torrential
Downpour of lubricating oil
A lit cherry thrown to the gasoline
Igniting the heated turmoil
So sincere are the sentiments conveyed to me by you
Yet, it is only you I fear, have abandoned
Slightest attention, to the possibility in an eyeballs view
Be reasonable and give credit where credit is due
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Copyright ©
Lancaster
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2005-07-24 22:11:16]
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Re: SUCKS
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:41:15 PM AEST
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Well I'll give credit where it's due...bravo! This is a well written piece, and you expressed yourself very well as always...It's funny the way we can think of an old love like a 'burden' weighing us down...hunching us over...I like the way you convey that, and it can be so true...Well done.
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Re: SUCKS
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 01:09:29 AM AEST
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I hear you loud and clear:
"Make one wrong move
And spin the vessel
Capsized in a torrential
Downpour of lubricating oil
A lit cherry thrown to the gasoline
Igniting the heated turmoil"
great lines here..
I doubt I could be anymore forward with my special someone.. yet always.. I wind up in the same place as this..
I felt every word of it..
B
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