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The Mirror
Contributed by
HatchetGirl
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Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 05:46:12 AM in AEST
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I look into the mirror, but what do I see
somone there stareing back at me
I looked with great awe
for there was the key to eturnal life
that belonged to the life within me
I dare not take hold, for I knew my destiny
to become weak and old, but there l stood
looking into the dark and cold
that lay so deep inside of me
so far down l coun't have told
l was so far gone in my mind
l didn't my enemy stab me from behind
stealing my soul form my body
and l was startled to find, the reason l died
was that someone stared back at me
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Re: The Mirror
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by HatchetGirl on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 05:50:15 AM AEST
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| I love it... of corse l wrote it |
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Re: The Mirror
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 06:59:12 AM AEST
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for there was the key to eturnal life
that belonged to the life within me
Is that supposed to be eternal? Anyways i liked the content of the poem, you just re-used your words, but other than that i liked it. I truely did.
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Re: The Mirror
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by desireemiote on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 07:01:10 AM AEST
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better than i ever did with edgar allen poe style for sure...i dont do styles too well... unless i have a lot of time and help from my favorite poetry teacher. I may not know poetry but I know what i like... hehe
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Re: The Mirror
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by Kayden on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 05:23:54 PM AEST
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I love ths poem it makes you think a little bit. You sure did a good job on this poem. I love the last five lines.
-Jimmy |
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Re: The Mirror
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 10:28:13 PM AEST
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great write! this was truely awesome. and it makes you think about it and stuff. good job there, and i like the ending a lot. keep up the good work!
~sprints |
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Re: The Mirror
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by Kitty06 on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 02:45:04 PM AEST
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| Very interesting outlook. I like the entire idea of how you used the mirror. I have read some Edgar Allan Poe, and I think you did a great job. Reiterating lines over and over again is a big thing in his poetry. Great job. |
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Re: The Mirror
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by TrowaDaryk on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 02:34:39 PM AEST
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| This is good very close to the edgar allen poe thing but not completely |
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