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Free Yet Imprisoned
Contributed by
ButchCorpuz
on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 09:52:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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~o~
Each night, I lie restless on my bed
Pictures of you keep clouding my head
These portraits of what my heart has seen
Come with questions of what might have been
Visions of us being together
What might have been, I’d always wonder
The feeling of your arms around me
Is just something for my dreams to see
The bliss of catching your lovely scent
Just a dream of what was never meant
To gently hold your face towards mine
Would never appear in fate’s design
Only in dreams could I understand
Feeling the warmth of holding your hand
And in dreams, I often fancy this
To feel the tenderness of your kiss
Sadly, the dream soon comes to an end
I wake up trying to comprehend
Now that you’re gone, what else can I do?
Just to tell you how much I love you
To tell you that you’re the biggest part
Of this space I keep inside my heart
A vast space for you and for you alone
You, the only love I’ve ever known
With your love, I’d find my redemption
Without it, I’d die in seclusion
The burden of losing you forever
Makes death seem lighter than a feather
I’m imprisoned by love, please save me
Come back to me, I beg you, set me free.
~o~
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ButchCorpuz
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2005-07-23 21:52:21]
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Re: Free Yet Imprisoned
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by Vampire_Slander on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 10:00:58 PM AEST
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| very indepth, I like it alot. |
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Re: Free Yet Imprisoned
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by suicidal_imbecile on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 11:11:46 PM AEST
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i can relate. my boyfriend broke up with me in the middle night i hit my rock bottom, so it was double rock bottom. I miss him I love him, but it will never happen.
i like your poem and the way it flows, good job
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Re: Free Yet Imprisoned
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by Spike on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 05:48:41 AM AEST
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A smooth and compelling rhythm, very accomplished rhyming, imaginative take on breaking up imprisoning your heart. Plus the coverage of feelings and issues within a breakup is very good - obviously you have had some experience of the pain. I read this one a few times and enjoyed it very much. Keep posting!
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Re: Free Yet Imprisoned
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by thepizzaguy on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 11:04:47 AM AEST
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| Interesting paradox that you present here. Great job. |
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Re: Free Yet Imprisoned
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by manic_x_pressive on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 03:50:13 PM AEST
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| very good writing. i can really relate as i have been feeling the same way for the last 2 years myself. |
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