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Hell's Trap Door
Contributed by
LolaWhite
on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 01:41:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Why are the birds singing happy songs
In the burning sands of this hell?
I think they are sharing secrets
That they weren't supposed to tell
Spies, and terrorists with feathers and beaks
That live amongst the death and rot of Society's downward streaks
One day we will be finished
And they will sing no more
When we open up the gates of Heaven
And slam shut Hell's trap door
Copyright ©
LolaWhite
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2005-07-23 01:41:13]
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:21:16 AM AEST
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| omg! i love this poem! you rock! keep on writing1 |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:21:35 AM AEST
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| omg! i love this poem! you rock! keep on writing! |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by MomentInTime on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:29:24 AM AEST
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Well... I enjoyed reading your poem even though I got lost on the theme...
Who do the birds represent?
Are they bad?
Will they stop singing when we all die?
Could well be me lol
Jordan :o) |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:44:54 AM AEST
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Wow, nice job Lola...I can understand why this would be a sore spot for you...Love that ending...can really feel the tension.
Scorp. |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by sride686 on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 03:06:49 AM AEST
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| Great right my love and it was worded very well. Its funny because we were just talking about this. You write great poetry and I look forward to more. Miss you like crazy and I love to come on and see your work it makes me feel a little closer to you when were so fare apart. My love is with you always….Steve |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by sride686 on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 03:19:07 AM AEST
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I just had to write one more quick comment because this write was just really good babe. Its got those lines that just hang in my mind.
That live amongst the death and rot of Society's downward streaks
When we open up the gates of Heaven
And slam shut Hell's trap door
Very powerful write with no space for error….it was flawless. I love you and this is a strong subject for the both of us right now. Love you always, your Steve |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:56:15 PM AEST
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"When we open up the gates of Heaven
And slam shut Hell's trap door". I am loving those lines. I say AMEN and I wish there was some way we could expedite it befor too many of the good are maimed or killed. I pray for all the heros like Steve and other friends that are over there. Everyone, man/woman is a great hero to me. The families sitting at home waiting on them are also heros of America. God bless you all.
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 03:40:24 PM AEST
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A truly touching peice of poetry with a flarvoring of hope, lovely writting as always
Lola . . .
Ben |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by Whisper on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 03:17:00 AM AEST
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Nicely put. Quick, straight and clear. No problem understanding how or what emotion is being felt here. Thanks for sharing
Whisper |
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Re: Hell's Trap Door
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:00:19 AM AEST
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OMG that was awesome. I love the way you did this. It brought so many subjects up. Good ending too.
Jane~ |
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