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Hello then Goodbye 4ever
Contributed by
Mikayla
on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 09:00:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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i see you in flaming desserted aspire
you look at me as if i was a bug
then you carry me home away forever you go
then i asumlally shrug?
where are you
please come find me
Copyright ©
Mikayla
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2005-07-22 21:00:58]
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Re: Hello then Goodbye 4ever
(User Rating: 1 )
by MomentInTime on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 04:27:22 AM AEST
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I rather like short and to the point... and your message is clear.
This line I don't understand:
i see you in flaming desserted aspire
Keep an eye out for spelling, punctuation and grammar whilst you are practicing... it's best to get into good habits from the start.
Keep on keeping on...
Jordan :o)
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Re: Hello then Goodbye 4ever
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by Kayden on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 11:35:32 PM AEST
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| Keep practice and youll get better. All though i dont think the title fits it. |
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