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Lonely won't leave me alone...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 07:48:36 PM in AEST
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I lay asleep dreaming
But when the night is through
My dreams vanish quickly
As I awake alone and without you
lonely fuels my empty heart
Since you walked out the door
Where did I go wrong?
Was it because I wanted a little more?
Now I'm just a faded memory
That lingers in the back of your mind
You try so hard to forget everything
So those memories of me you won't find
Lonely won't leave me alone
Since you picked up and walked away
You took with you my better half
Now it's like I'm dying slowly everyday
No lonely won't leave me alone
It adorns in my ailing heart
As I have no one to call my own
I'm silently falling apart
Each and every night
All I dream about is you
Together we're so in love
Until the night makes it's way through
I'm hoping you'll come back to me
I'll be praying for that very day
As lonely forever courts my heart
Until you once again come my way...
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 08:35:55 PM AEST
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How very clever the Title you chose ED
And the poem throughout was mastered with the theme throughtout which is very important for your reader, Repeating it over and over emphasis your approach.
I really enjoyed reading this also, and that's important, more so than anything else.
You have abundance of talent!!
Warm love ot you
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 11:10:09 PM AEST
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*sigh* Yes, I have experienced some of these things in my past too...You expressed yourself quite well in this piece Sue. I could really feel your emotions throughout this write. Well done. As someone said to me earlier today..."Dreams never die, only hopes..." Remember, as you said...you live up to your nickname; )
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 11:17:16 PM AEST
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So very very painful Dreamer..
an excellent post nonetheless..
Painful though-
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 01:09:40 AM AEST
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You pour out your pain beautifully. The ache and longing is visually apparent and leaves an empty ache in my heart for the lonliness you have. Splendid write.
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Justintears on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 08:48:57 AM AEST
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| Great write. I've been there myself and have felt the same way completely. Sometimes the pain makes us even stronger as we "learn to let go". Wonderfully done... |
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by veenu on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 09:13:33 AM AEST
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thats great keep it up
thanks for sharing
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by syenn0512 on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 01:59:18 AM AEST
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I feel your pain
Loneliness kills..... |
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:14:17 PM AEST
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Once again u evoke emotions of the heart in a way only u can do, touching reaching longing, trying 2 satisfy the heart that is
prepetualy breaking in you, such a beautiful and endering plea to be loved, sorry 4 your pain my friend . . .
(((((sue))))) Ben |
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Archie on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 07:49:02 PM AEST
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This is very good. It is good to be loved and to love. It always hurts when love goes away. Now that I think of it this song comes to mind.
"You die inside a little each time that you open your eyes.
You try to hide but you must face the truth
that love has gone away"
Your poem is very well written sentiment to a very sad occurance in life.
Quote from "When Love Has Gone Away" by El DeBarge |
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:22:16 AM AEST
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This reminds me a lot of a song. Loneliness knows me by name.
I loved the 27 line. Lonely courts my heart.... what a lovely way to put it. May it never have you.
Take care.
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 04:57:24 PM AEST
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the better half? how can that be when you are whole.. you are much love.. your words shine in it.
So those memories of me you won't find
This is true.. a good block .. funny how it is that they try so hard not to love what they know they do.. there is something more about them that causes them to do this, it is not the lack of their love.. but the lack of life they want to present ... a deeper trouble of their own.. nothing you can do, that they won't do.. trust, believe in yourself.. for the loving person that you are.. there is a person out there just waiting to be with you.. they are dreaming as well... lovely poem.. RL |
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Re: Lonely won't leave me alone...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 11:35:15 AM AEST
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| Very deep emotion put into words so well...Mike |
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