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Unknown Powers
Contributed by
Tricky
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Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:16:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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A girl stood alone
She wasn't afraid
Nothing could hurt her
So she felt safe
Out of the blue
Something came from the deep
It stirred her soul
Nothing seemed real
It arose from below
She knew what it was
It struck her down
But she rose up again
Nothing could keep her down
The figure stepped back
Then came at full force
She shattered it with one word
The beast was gone
What had she spoken
No one could tell
There was no one around
Her triumph goes unknown
She still stands alone
But in her soul
She knew she saved the world
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Tricky
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2005-07-22 14:16:15]
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by Fwog on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:27:34 PM AEST
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I enjoyed the simple flow of this write, what was the word she uttered? ( just curious).
Simple but so enjoyable.
Thanks
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by Tricky on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:41:22 PM AEST
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| Honestly.....I don't even know the word...It supposed to make you think....it makes me think, and i wrote it. |
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 03:15:04 PM AEST
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Hmmm something about this I like...It makes me think, and this could be taken in so many different ways...You have it listed under 'mystical' but in an abstract sort of way it could be seen as a self struggle...abuse...conquering emotions...As far as structure and whatnot...I enjoyed the tale overall, but found it perhaps a little too vague in some parts, but I think the format works quite well. I guess it just would've been nice to see this story unravel a little bit more...How 'bout a sequel? : )
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by thepizzaguy on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 11:02:56 PM AEST
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| I think that we all somewhat have unknown powers. I don't think of these powers as anything supernatural. Just gifts that we use to make others lives better. Nice write. |
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by gwenevere on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 12:27:59 PM AEST
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| Good poem.I wonder if the word she used was love.It's the one thing that could save us all, Ros |
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Re: Unknown Powers
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 09:35:56 PM AEST
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Holy crap, Christen!
This is better than 1/2 of the junk I write... more like 2/3 of it, actually.
You're going to be better than me at my own thing, dang it! lol
Lylas
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