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Winter Rest
Contributed by
sride686
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Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:37:29 PM in AEST
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Haiku
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Now darker they breath
These winter storms of days old
Now dead to my soul
~Steve~
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sride686
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2005-07-22 12:37:29] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:46:51 PM AEST (User
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Very good first haiku!! i like how you wrote the stoms and how dark they seem to breathe...spectacular imagery
keep up the good work Steve!
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:17:50 PM AEST (User
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steve that was fascinating amazing how so few words can say so much . . .
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:02:58 PM AEST (User
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Well done, Steve.
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 04:12:59 PM AEST (User
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Brilliant Haiku, Steve. Following the Japanese tradition perfectly.
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 09:21:47 PM AEST (User
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A brillant first haiku Steve. Keep up the great work.
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by suicidal_imbecile on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 12:48:43 AM AEST (User
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hey man, sorry its been so long. Life is fu*t up right now, if i knew what haiku was maybe i could respond to your poem. I hope your doing well
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by LolaWhite on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 01:11:17 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful my Steve. I'm glad that you went out on a limb and took a chance with Haiku. You wrote them better than I do...but I guess I got out all the kinks so you could make a perfect one right. LOL j/k. I too like the imagary of the breathing winter storms. It's a Haiku in the traditional nature sense but it has you written all over it. I loved it!! One for the book.
Your little wifey poet,
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by veenu on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 09:30:16 AM AEST (User
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oh!!!!!!!! great
darker they breath............... |
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 10:23:48 PM AEST (User
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very nice haiku. i enjoyed this one and i liked the imagery of it. very well put together. keep up the good work!
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Re: Winter Rest
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:19:40 AM AEST (User
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Steve, this was a nicely writen Haiku.
Thanks for sharing it.
Jane~ |
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