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The Forgotten Theater
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 08:57:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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The Forgotten Theater
The curtains open and the cast swiftly appears,
As the crowd stands silent and waiting.
The cob webs show neglect and corrosion shows the years,
That this transparent figure has been waning.
The cast is upheld only by one single girl,
Outfitted in a beautiful red dress and matching red shoes.
The show starts with her smile, a few moves and a twirl,
As the crowd of a thousand lost souls applaud her, her due.
She is amazing in the act, as she dances and jumps abound,
Though the seats are all empty and tattered.
She holds the greatest smile, yet weeps rather loud,
But when the show comes to the end, she gracefully bows as if nothing even matters.
The curtains hang serrated from lack of affection,
And nobody cares that the stage stands rotten.
All-in-all the darkness creates the deception,
For the shadows to embrace the theater- all forgotten.
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-07-21 20:57:15]
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 09:07:32 PM AEST
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| if only i could get this bloody smile off of my face. i loved it clark, and as i already told you it made my cry...and here come the blimey tears again. one of your best, as always your lil sis. |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 10:06:46 PM AEST
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| Clark, a perfection depiction of this site, whether you meant it for here or not. I think you were right when you used the word DOWNFALL. There is a really great site on my home page. They even have humans that do the censoring and spelling checks. The webmaster is always checking in several times a day and there are some very nice people and poets there. I hope to see you there for I think that is where I will be most of the time from now on. My best to you, my friend. Rita My username there is the same, btw. |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 10:33:53 PM AEST
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Clark I'm really glad you decided to post this...As I said to you earlier, I love this write. It may in fact be one of the most tragic things I've ever read...It is very melancholy, and you expressed yourself fantastically...each word, each line is perfect as far as I'm concerned. I could picture this depressing sight before my eyes as I read along, and reading it this second time, gave me chills. Very well done Clark...I think this may be your best yet. Very sad to see you leaving...
Scorp. |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by venkat on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 04:24:38 AM AEST
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| Great write..amazing performance. I was an actor and also a silent spectator..venkat |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 05:16:03 AM AEST
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wow amazing write.
I am sorry that you had to go.I know this site is not like it use to be.So sad very sad.
well take care.
hugs |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:32:04 AM AEST
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Ohh this was Amazing Clark. Your imagery was perfection. This poem got me hooked from the beggining to the end.
Thanks for sharing this piece with us.
Jane~ |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 08:24:42 PM AEST
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wow very deep
much more then meets the eye
her pride kept her going strong
and your poem went the same
great job |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 08:25:04 PM AEST
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A superb masterpiece so brillantly written. You're a truly talented and gifted writer Clark.
A sad, but very captivating piece of poetry. It's so sad to see u go. I love ur work it's always unique and remarkable. You'll be sadly missed my dear friend.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by BloodyTearDrops on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 01:04:49 AM AEST
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Clark
I know you are mad at me. But you should keep friggin writing. You are one of the best. I can't believe you are like, well to me its like, giving up. That makes me really sad. I will miss you tons.
Forever Bloody,
Chelsey |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 10:15:08 AM AEST
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| This is a cool poem. (Even though it has no rhythym) You tell a great story and your rhyme is consitent all the way through. |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 07:56:47 AM AEST
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| fantastic write I absolutely loved it ,,you get a very well done from me,,,Eddy |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 08:22:53 PM AEST
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Liked the whole concept behind this . Great visuals
Very well done
Barkeep! A Coke for my young friend lol
Larry |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 07:50:35 PM AEST
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Clark, I really wish you would post once again...
This is a fantastic tribute to Jen..
I love the images in this, and the sadness behind it all. A few lines really hit me, especially in the 4th stanza.
An amazing write,
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by emystar on
Monday, 9th January 2006 @ 07:27:00 AM AEST
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I'm jus trying to do so catching up so I'm very late reading this.
U r a very talented writer. I don't know why u left but u should come back 'cause we need your talent here.
Luv, huggs, Please come back,
emy |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by catz77 on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 02:06:55 PM AEST
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hey clark i dought you will be
reading this since your not posting and i am really late in reading this
but i enjoyed your poems and hope you do post again i need to look forward to some great poetry
well thanks for your comments(well not all of them lol )
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th June 2012 @ 09:02:15 PM AEST
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Wow, that was almost seven years ago. I just got finished with a PM to someone telling them I've been a member for seven years.
So, seeing as how this poem was posted around 3 1/2 months after I joined, I can see how I may have missed it. So sorry but it is truly a vast land, this ol' YPDC. I'll try and check more out.
Anyway, this is a seriously brilliant writing. Seemed so ghostly to me. The imagery of that filled my head as I read. Not sure that's what you were going for, but that's the imagery that entered this ol wearing mind.
I hope you get back in touch with essentially9 too.
Take care,
Tim |
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Re: The Forgotten Theater
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 2nd August 2014 @ 01:50:29 AM AEST
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hiya clark, must say i agree with tim, it is rather ghostly,
abandoned theater and all, exquisite writing, so beautifully
penned with perfection in rhyme, style and flow, also must
add dear friend i'm so happy you are still here:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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