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I Want To Be
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 03:44:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I want to be that breath you take
When your minds not in the right place,
I want to be that drink you swallow
When you don’t know who you are anymore,
I want to be that one your holding
Just to feel like your needed,
I want to be the lips your kissing
Just to know that your wanted,
I want to be the one you look at
And know that’s the one you want,
I want to be the one you have,
Not the one you lost.
I want to be the one in your thoughts,
When night creeps in through your window,
I want to be the one that follows your tears,
And listens to the wind blow.
I want to be your chaos,
Your perfection.
I want to be your drug,
Your addiction.
I want to be your joy,
Your hate.
I want to be your haze,
Your fate.
I want to be your anger,
Your happiness.
I want to be your kiss,
Your kindness.
I want to be your high,
Your low.
I want to be your heart and mind,
Everything you know.
I want to be your song,
The kind your heart sings.
I want to be your girl,
Your everything.
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xxbreathlessx
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2005-07-21 15:44:35]
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Re: I Want To Be
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by SinginSilence on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:31:45 AM AEST
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| This poem is hopeful. A good composition, I like your word play, the contradictions. At first there's a sense of desperation, or so i picked up, but it just ends up being romantic, and i guess sometimes that can be the same thing. It made me smile, haha i wish i knew a girl that would write something like this for me. Well done. |
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Re: I Want To Be
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 02:51:01 AM AEST
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Nice! You expressed yourself very well, and I hope you get your guy: ) This had a really good flow to it, and I love how it became more frenzied in the end, to go along with the emotions...I like this!
Scorp. |
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Re: I Want To Be
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by remote on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 07:21:32 AM AEST
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| This is quite a break from your good work, Brian Adams anyone? (I always felt that next line would be I want to be your underwear). |
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