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A few dry tears
Contributed by
In_a_while
on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 10:15:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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i miss the times when i was eager
to catch a smile when they would leave her
like butterflies, they would flutter by
the moments i would let her sigh
.......
i wish for times when days were young
when i sat with her through times of fun
dancing slow to a lady in red
feeling my heartbeat's drum instead
......
but memories are not what's right here
she's seems so far yet seems so near
what's been across the span of years
was captured in a few wet tears
.....
memories...memories
raining down....
pouring...pouring...
without a sound...
dw
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Re: A few dry tears
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 11:06:03 AM AEST
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"what's been across the span of years
was captured in a few wet tears"
It's words like this that make a poem so heartfelt, meaningful, and worth remembering.
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Re: A few dry tears
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 11:11:53 AM AEST
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Very effective piece here Dwayne...I really like this one. It's not complicated, yet you still expressed yourself so well...The beginning and ending were both exceptional! Well done: )
Scorp. |
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Re: A few dry tears
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by Tricky on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 12:35:47 PM AEST
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| Very deep. I loved it. It reminds me of my past relatinships. Keep on doing what your doing. |
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Re: A few dry tears
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by sride686 on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 01:25:02 PM AEST
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What a write DW one of your best in my book and much enjoyed my friend. Their were some great lines in it and it was written very well. I really like the composition of it and the way you broke it down. I really liked these lines.
dancing slow to a lady in red
feeling my heartbeat's drum instead
what's been across the span of years
was captured in a few wet tears
Talk about imagery, you really took my mind away with this write. The last stanza was also a great ending to this write. Take care my friend and keep up the great writes as always they are much enjoyed….Steve |
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Re: A few dry tears
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by LolaWhite on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:17:56 AM AEST
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How beautiful! I love the rhythym this poem has...much like a rainy day it had a sound all of it's own. Such beautiful memories portrayed in a lovely poem.
I enjoyed it much,
LolaWhite
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Re: A few dry tears
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by Shorty_88 on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 08:54:15 AM AEST
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Great Poem, This is the fist poem i have read by
you and i am definately impressed. You words give the reader a clear view of what you are
writing about.
Keep up the fantastic work and i look foward to reading more from you.
Warmest Regards, Tara |
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Re: A few dry tears
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 01:32:30 PM AEST
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wow
That is beautiful
I love it
--> Rae
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