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Uncontrollable
Contributed by
dorkfish
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Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 04:20:49 PM in AEST
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It consumes our bodies and minds
It preys on the innocent
It makes the strong weak
It acts with no cause
It devours our hearts and spits them out
It is careless
It is heartless
It is devious
It takes our loved ones from us
It feels no remorse
It is always looking for the next one
It feeds off our will
It fuels itself on our pain
It is ruthless
It is guiltless
It is evil
...........It is Cancer
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2005-07-20 16:20:49]
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Re: Uncontrollable
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by JenJen on
Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 04:29:35 PM AEST
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im so sorry to hear bout ur grandmother
i hope she gets better soon!
ur poem is really deeo and meaning ful! well done and keep it up
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Re: Uncontrollable
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by JenJen on
Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 04:30:07 PM AEST
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im so sorry to hear bout ur grandmother
i hope she gets better soon!
ur poem is really deep and meaning ful! well done and keep it up
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Re: Uncontrollable
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 11:56:40 PM AEST
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There is really nothing I can say to you that will ease your pain about this. I have been in this position and I know how much it hurts. I can say to you that all you can do is be with her as much as you can and assure her of your love (which she already knows) but now is the time she really needs to hear and feel it. Blessings to you all. If you need to just rant or vent, I would be more than willing to be there for you. Peace be with you.
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Re: Uncontrollable
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 11:25:20 AM AEST
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I'm so sorry to hear that about your Grandmother...it's such a terrible disease.
As far as this poem goes...I really like the format, and I think putting those lines in bold was very effective, and really made the words come alive...This is a well expressed piece, and you really drove home your emotions with the style this was written in. Well done.
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