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.:choke.me:.
Contributed by
butterflystripe
on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 10:02:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Lying
Lying here
Choking on my thoughts
Over and over
And over
And.
Over.
Alone.
But yet so supported,
I have everyone
Or do I?
Yes.
I have everyone
But yet I do not have myself
Can I have a thought
To end all thoughts?
A word
To end all words?
Killing.
Killing me
This rancid silence
Is threatening as
I try
to
murder my
memories
In need of
something
new.
To wash away the past
How am I to love
In this world of so much hate?
The same careless faces
passing me by each day.
The truth is
that in this
Day and
Age
The majority of
people are only in
this life for their
own personal gain
Choke.me
As I lay upon
My bed
Dreaming
To set me free.
Choke me.
To.
set.
me.
free.
Choke Me
As I lay alone.
Alone.
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butterflystripe
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2005-07-19 10:02:53]
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Re: .:choke.me:.
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 10:34:04 AM AEST
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very honest and straightforward.. i liked it a lot because i could absolutely relate to the part about seeing the same careless faces...
i hope that the mood passes and that all gets better for ya k?
good write!!
dw |
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Re: .:choke.me:.
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by PHISHBATES on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 12:54:06 PM AEST
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| the raceing thoughts of useless knowledge drown us all, call a friend and go for a walk. nice work, tell me if ya find out how to turn it all off... |
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Re: .:choke.me:.
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by bananasmoothie on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 03:12:10 AM AEST
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Starts out promising, but then just goes on. And on. Forever. You also hit enter a lot, a whole lot, and used a lot of repetition like I am here. Repetition. Like I am here. Really just deterred me. I couldn't even finish it, it was just so long. So. You lost this reader. Because you just kept going on. And on. With.
The.
Same.
Stuff.
And no.
Apparent.
New. Thoughts.
By the end of it I wanted to grant your original wish: I wanted to
choke. you.
To set myself free.
Of course, maybe I'm just too ADHD for pieces like this.
'Nanners. |
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