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Alone
Contributed by
FleurdeSang
on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 12:53:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Hollow...
Resonating loneliness flooding every crevice,
My heart, an empty shell of lost dreams and forbidden romance,
The beautiful crimson rose that I once was,
Now, I am no more than a pile of black petals...
A blanket of arctic sorrow embraces me,
The wretched face of depression sneers at me through the mirror,
And the calloused hands of self-hate molest me...
Reckless attempts of restoring hope,
But hope, my dearest friend, he hides somewhere in the radiance of the sun,
And I, with my waxen wings, cannot fly to him,
Nor to the warm, welcoming arms of the Day Ruler...
How many centuries have I not seen her smile?
She sacrifices her comforting shine, yet I do not feel it...
A stubborn cloud of nostalgia and anguish casts an eternal shadow over me,
Drowning me in its cold indifference, its harsh abuse...
And where can I find my cup of sunshine?
My divine inspiration, my words laced with bliss?
I am finding no beauty in the things that once freed me...
Wrapped in soaked pillows and icy blankets,
My solitude is emphasized by the forlorn melody of raindrops,
Tears from the sky, tears from my eyes,
Creating hymns of past memories in sorrowful unison...
I feel so...
ALONE...
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FleurdeSang
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2005-07-18 12:53:53]
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Re: Alone
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by PHISHBATES on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:14:54 PM AEST
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great vocabulary. i understand this write. very well written
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Re: Alone
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:18:44 PM AEST
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this is an extreemly well written piece with a great use of metaphors, keep it up
megs.
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Re: Alone
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:28:34 PM AEST
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wow you really did a good job on this one.
well done |
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Re: Alone
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by brokenwings on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:40:59 PM AEST
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omg that touched me so deep, thnx for the write it was beautiful
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Re: Alone
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by justme03 on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 02:20:18 PM AEST
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wow, u are so truly amazing. all the poems of yours i have read have been able to touch me so deeply and you write so beautifully. u r so talented. thank you for sharing this poem. i loved it, i wish i could write as well as you. i hope maybe someday i will...
luv, Kortnie |
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Re: Alone
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by freckle on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 07:10:14 PM AEST
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Brilliant. I loved this one. It takes you there. Great job, what more can I say? Loved it!
Carol |
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Re: Alone
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 07:31:50 PM AEST
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A poetic diary of tragic circumstanses that
engulped me with overwhelming emotions,
you are a writter of imence proportions, you
write with a ripping effect, one would do well
to warn there heart of the revealations to
come . . .
(((((stephy))))) Ben |
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Re: Alone
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 07:58:16 PM AEST
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wow... so rich... so beautiful... makes my poems seem threadbare in comparison!!
thank you dear, for sharing... and are you really alone??
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Re: Alone
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by vibes2go on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 11:44:02 PM AEST
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| It is hard to be alone .. isn't it? Feels bleak and cold. Like this write .. I often think of rain as teardrops, but, but in a good way.. rain is so clensing, and tears are too, for the eyes, and the soul. Solitude can be forced .. or self-inflicted; either way it's lonely. I feel that in this work ..... keep posting. |
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Re: Alone
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 01:31:27 AM AEST
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Your imagery is astounding. I could feel the emptiness of what once was. Stunning work.
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Re: Alone
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 07:37:43 PM AEST
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Wow Stephy all I can say is I can relate to
this so well at the moment. The sun is
shining, but I am angry and cold and
depressed and this poem wow I honestly
hope you don't feel like this because no one,
least of all you, deserves to feel like this. Just
every line was written so perfect and was just
filled with ache... I don't know what more to
say, but I think this is definitely one of my
favourite poems of yours.
*hugs for Steph*
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