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A Field with no Scarecrow
Contributed by
enjoiskating6
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Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 12:18:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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My dreams rise like fog and fade,
the sun and moon make a trade,
im still stuck here looking into grey,
these moments never seem to last,
just as soon as they've gone passed,
no time to cry and no time to laugh,
i never know quiet what i see,
but my heart would disagree,
it knows its been torn right in half,
they all say seeing is believing,
everything i see's decieving,
i wish time would wash it all away,
i look ahead to what you'll bring,
i know ill take in everything,
just throw your jokes and make them sting,
but i believe your heart is good,
but your mind will rot like wood,
you'll never fly with that broken wing,
so just let me lie in peace,
a lost and broken puzzle piece,
that use to be part of something,
the rest was lost long ago,
but still found a way to grow,
i was the leach forced to let go,
but its okay ill fall asleep,
without a hopeful dream to keep,
im just a feild with no scarecrow.
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Re: A Field with no Scarecrow
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:37:25 PM AEST
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Very nice and poetically strong... the imagery and rhymes are right on the ball. I definitely dig the title you have too!
keep up the strong writing!
dw
ps. My fave line?
"so just let me lie in peace
a lost and broken puzzle piece"
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Re: A Field with no Scarecrow
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by Kie on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 06:53:21 PM AEST
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The title was eye candy and drew my attention. I liked the overall feel of your poem. I think if you tweaked it a tad for spelling errors it would make it even better to read.
I think this is the first thing i've read of yours. Welcome to YPDC.
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