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The day I fell from heaven
Contributed by
emoDCgirl36
on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 07:13:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I watched the road as it was ran over by the snickering cars
I watched the man go mad with hate and happiness
I watched the water fall to the ground so cheaply
I watched as the people interpreted a meaningful poem as trash
I watched the chair sweat as the heavy man sat down to read
I watched the fan blow my hair like it wants to get away
I watched as people listen to their music saying it's unique
I watched as the mad man took the gun to his head
I watched as the blood fell from my fingers
I watched the people wipe the water up
I watched the road crash the cars for revenge
I watched the people die in a shootout for destroying a man's poem
I watched the heavy man fall to the floor sobbing for air
I watched the fan as I shot it for trying to leave
I watched as the people learned that they weren't all that unique and went suicidal for it all.
I watched myself as it went past me before I died.
I watched as my hope fell like water falls to the ground so cheaply
But why?
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emoDCgirl36
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2005-07-17 19:13:22]
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Re: The day I fell from heaven
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 07:18:41 PM AEST
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| nicely put and wriiten. |
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Re: The day I fell from heaven
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by waos on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 08:21:33 PM AEST
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That was good, repitition was cool, and you had some really
interesting descriptions of things. Keep it up.
~Kara |
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Re: The day I fell from heaven
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by Kie on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 07:05:39 PM AEST
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I didn't realize I was reading suicide poetry until I had half way read this.
Your perspective, thoughts and inner turmoil was reflective in your poem.
But, I have a difficult time relating to suicide because life is so fragile and I can't imagine anything worth giving it up for.
I do think you have talent.
Kie |
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Re: The day I fell from heaven
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by allforyou on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 05:38:25 PM AEST
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Completely awesome poem. I love how you interpretted ordinary things...like cars on a road....its just amazing....GREAT write!
--kara |
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