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Spiraling
Contributed by
LolaWhite
on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:21:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Spiraling
The ground I face
You lied to me without a trace
My heart bleeds and aches with pain
We've lost more than you could ever gain
How could you make me feel like this?
Lie to my face and then give me a kiss?
I love you more than you'll ever know
I can forgive, but never let go
You make the world believe you're right?
But sin, lust and greed have damaged your sight
You can't see the pain I feel
I'm not sure how I can deal
A bulett? Pills? Perhaps a knife?
To kill off all you pain and strife?
I don't deserve this betrayal and lies
My life- rock bottom- tears and lonely cries.
Copyright ©
LolaWhite
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2005-07-16 14:21:15]
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Re: Spiraling
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:46:14 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC. This is a great site and a lovely lot of people. The poem is good. I will make the statement that true love does not hurt like that, so maybe it is time to hold your tears, chin up, and move on with life.
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Re: Spiraling
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:49:09 PM AEST
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This is the first poem i 've read by u very
effective beautiful style and most definately
emotionaly provoking, in a word, "A True
Master Peice, " reality at it's best or worse,
which ever one prefers, if i may say so, truly,
one of of kind writting . . . **********
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Re: Spiraling
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:55:22 PM AEST
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Sorry (embarassed, lol) wrong img tag.
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Re: Spiraling
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by Sexi_Lexi on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 03:54:32 PM AEST
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| I really like ur poem well done! |
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Re: Spiraling
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 08:47:08 PM AEST
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| Welcome to YPDC. This poem is fantastic, for it being your first one. Well penned. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Spiraling
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by Dorkfish on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 02:32:16 PM AEST
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| Great job! That was great for your first posted piece. A wonderful opening piece. |
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