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OUTCAST
Contributed by
wilma
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Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 09:00:45 AM in AEST
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I elope with my soul,
My only friend in this world.
I am away from my mind,
Only with my thoughts can I express emotion.
Though I am away from civilisation in my own eyes,
I never will be in this crowd of black mundane crows,
Whilst, though I don’t feel it I am flying free
Because I am not of public interest.
Outcast.
My brain is in bleakness,
And as I go to buy myself some positive thoughts
The sharp knife of humanity
Might kill me or never succeed in braking me down.
This shop will not sell me ecstatic thoughts,
No shop will accept life.
I will forever sleep and dream my life away,
It will then matter not about how my life became and ended.
I will forever hold my peace to anything
Once I start my self-instated coma.
Start now.
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wilma
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2005-07-16 09:00:45]
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Re: OUTCAST
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by bernard on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 09:58:37 AM AEST
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| Wima you have talent, keep on writing try something light for a change you say you are only eleven. Write something easier ,perhaps something funny. Whatever you do keep on writing, Top marks from bernard. |
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Re: OUTCAST
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by justme03 on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 09:59:27 AM AEST
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WOW! thats about all i can say WOW! this poem is
awesome. i cant believe ur only 11! WOW
i loved this poem!!! u did an awesome job. Keep it up, i really want to read more from you. u've got real talent! i didnt start writing poetry til a year ago when i was 14 and wow, i dont think i could ever write something liek this. awesome job!
luv, ~Kortnie~ |
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Re: OUTCAST
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by glassicallyunsuperficial on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 11:03:15 AM AEST
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Hey
being 11 doesn't mean you're not brilliant...
"I will forever sleep and dream my life away,
It will then matter not about how my life became and ended.
I will forever hold my peace to anything
Once I start my self-instated coma."
this is a line i can definitely relate to and dreams, they're just our escape, aren't they? I can't imagine living with no such thing...
Your poems are great..
Keep it comin'
cheers,
-glass
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Re: OUTCAST
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by LolaWhite on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:58:32 PM AEST
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WOW! You know 11 is a tough age but with a talent like writing you can go far in life. Great write. Keep expressing yourself and sharing with us.
Miss Lola White |
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