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Blame Myself
Contributed by
Unbreakable
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Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 09:05:34 PM in AEST
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If I'd known you were going to change me forever
that I would wake up knowing it wasn't a dream
If I could have seen into the future just a little bit
or if I knew how it would feel to hold back a scream
If I was less innocent or more aware of the world
and it's carnal ways hadn't caught me off guard
If I hadn't laughed so freely or lived so fully
maybe if I hadn't played quite so hard
Perhaps if I'd looked another way for acceptance
or if I never felt like I had to fit in
If I hadn't wanted to grow up so quickly
maybe I wouldn't have had to go where I've been
Maybe I could make it through one day without shame
or maybe I'd be able to laugh with all my heart
perhaps I could love with at least half of it
or feel anything at all before falling apart
Maybe I wouldn't have spent my life in depression
because I wouldn't have bottled it all up inside
maybe I wouldn't even feel this anger and hate
and with no need for secrets, I would never have lied
But at six years of age, you took all that from me
and you left me with only nightmares
still crying myself to sleep after all this time
so far from the girl who had no cares
Yet I can only find it in me to blame myself
for causing this hurt, this hate, this shame
and if I'd known then what I know now
maybe this story wouldn't have ended the same
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Re: Blame Myself
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 09:25:43 PM AEST
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aww thats a very deep and emotional write.
If you ever need to talk let me know.
take care
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Re: Blame Myself
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by xxbreathlessx on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 11:03:34 PM AEST
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| this poem flows so freely and really makes you want to read it all the way through. i think it really grabs the readers attention, almost like a mini story. sorry for what happened, but u have a great write here. |
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Re: Blame Myself
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by fielding88 on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:21:20 PM AEST
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It seems like a lot went into this one, and the subject matter is quite tragic, but hopefully therapeutic. You handled the structure of it quite nicely, and I dont think I could pick out a favourite verse here, because they were all memorable and you had something to say with each of them.
Your conclusion--however great it might be-- still might need a more optimistic view in your own eyes. It doesn't need editing or anything, but there are many other places to lay blame for anything that happens to a child.
Here's to hoping for a better tomorrow! Great write. |
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