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Just a Phone Call
Contributed by
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 05:40:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Her mother called my house Monday,
Her voice was calm but scared.
Nothing in this universe
Could have made me feel less prepared.
"Susi slit her wrists last night."
My heart had just stopped beating.
"She's in a pending condition.
The doctors almost couldn't stop her bleeding."
I couldn't speek, I couldn't breathe,
I couldn't sleep or eat.
I never thought that,
Susi would have ever gone that deep.
But Susi did,
And now she's lying in an old hospital bed.
Every day and night that week i prayed,
That Susi wouldn't end up dead.
Her mother called my house Thursday.
She sounded like she was crying.
And the words that were coming from her mouth,
Had given me wings for flying.
"Susi's now in recovery,
and getting better every day.
The doctors say that for the next 6 weeks,
Susi will have to stay."
Susi I just want you to know,
That I'll always be here.
Whenever you need a shoulder to cry on,
Or just a listening ear.
We hope that you get better soon Susi,
With you youth still in tact!
Everybody misses you,
And we can't wait to have you back.
Copyright ©
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
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2005-07-14 17:40:23]
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Re: Just a Phone Call
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 06:05:11 PM AEST
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this poem was really great. I'm sorry for what happened. I hope that your friend recovers.
bye,
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Re: Just a Phone Call
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by deathdrop on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 06:20:20 PM AEST
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this is a very sad poem!
i hope she gets better soon as well.
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Re: Just a Phone Call
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 06:47:06 PM AEST
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omg WOW
this is the first poem i have read that has made me cry. it was very touching and im sure ur friend will treasure this poem cuz it just shows how much sumone cares about her. i hope she gets fully recovered soon and i wish u and her the best. luv yas
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Re: Just a Phone Call
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 11:52:27 AM AEST
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Very nice Karis, it takes skill to put conversation in to a poem and still keep the overall flow of the piece. You were able to do that here and I enjoyed that aspect of this. I also liked the fact that you kept it sad but not as devastating as it actually was and you also lightened it up with hope near the end. This was a personal write and I don't think they needed to know the devastation of the situation as much as they needed to hear a hopeful piece. So great job, keep up the writing you are talented. I'm saving 20 bucks for you ;-)
.amanda. |
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Re: Just a Phone Call
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by fireispassion on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 01:19:06 PM AEST
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| i love your poem it's awesome. it rawks! |
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