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Death By Rhymes
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 01:29:16 PM in AEST
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A bird lifts wings to take flight
stops dead---chained---by unknown fright
Two lovers in bed, sparks ignite
The bride chooses a cream gown over white
maimed by another, but continues despite
Proud peacock bearing feathers so bright
Weary jury's still out on whether to indict
Troubled princess awaits her shining knight
Hunted rabbit wins a much needed respite
moments later his survival instinct leads to incite
In ones empty soul creeps in some light
Grieving widow continues on her lonesome plight
A greedy son screams the assets are his birthright
Cheating husband stumbles home, his alibi airtight
if only his wife had the gift of some foresight
She could've avoided loves venomous bite
Across town a boy and girl frolic under the pale moonlight
He whispers; "I love you", is it true? No, not quite...
Morning rush hour, an agitated man tells another; "Go fly a kite!"
the other driver merely smiles back, waves...(polite)
Brother and sister reach for the same toy---break into fight
A cautious girl takes a boy up on his dinner invite
Loving husband kisses his wife goodnight
Now I'm afraid this poem has reached it's height...
so I'll thank you all for reading my crazy write ; )
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 01:51:35 PM AEST
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lol i dont think this was crazy at all.
I find it more of a reality then anything.
Very refreshing to read.
awsome job scorppy girl. ;) |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 03:04:04 PM AEST
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errr, ummm, ahhh, unique, but delightful.
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 03:05:19 PM AEST
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| Brilliant display of talent, even if written out of boredom. |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by aplsdka on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 04:30:32 PM AEST
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| wow, that's really awesome. cool idea. |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 05:34:17 PM AEST
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very original and full of assorted imagery too...i liked it a lot... it was interesting to see how many rhymes you could come up with lol
thanks for sharing it!
later
dwayne |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by CarolinaBlue on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 06:21:11 PM AEST
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well that was interesting and different...I liked it! Even when bored and rambling your writes always seem to come together nicely. good job
~Blue~ |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 11:54:41 PM AEST
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| What can I say? I am such a fan. Another unique write. You are soooooo good. I look forward to seeing your next write. Much peace. Laura |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 02:44:14 AM AEST
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not so crazry very revealing, in betweens the lines where it's most, concealing, great write scorp your at your best as usual . . .
Ben |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 10:33:06 AM AEST
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"hey buddy, go fly your kite somewhere else!!!"
lol
im gonna try that
excellent write
nice images
plenty of insight
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 12:18:35 PM AEST
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| Cute rhymes...but my question is...How much of that is random, and how much is drawn from your own life??? :) |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 04:45:41 PM AEST
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On the contrary my poetry friend, this was marvelous in my sight! Isn't it amazing what alittle bit of rhyming will do!
I could relate to everything single line here, your insight is awesome as I too see you like and observe many people!!!
Thank you for sharing that with us, it will be one I shall never forget!
Wonderfulf!
Warm love to you and your wandering mind!
consue |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 12:41:44 AM AEST
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| Purely amazing how your boredom created such a wonderful write like taking us around the town tonight and letting us see a little peek into each person's and creature's life. Astounding!!! |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 12:10:51 AM AEST
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| well hopefully the epitaph wont rhyme at least =] i would say that if this was from anyone but you, i would tell them to try freestyle, but you made the rhyming work. i also liked the theme with love reoccuring thoughout this. |
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th August 2006 @ 07:59:51 PM AEST
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What the .......????? lol
You cawazy canucklehead!!!! This was awesome scorpy!!
A true DELIGHT!
[I would have given up half way!!! lol]
~Breezy
[who ADORES the exceptional title!!]
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 02:37:28 PM AEST
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this is one of those excellent gently flowing floating
types i love so very muchly, the real in reality, the
breath that makes the poem's breathing so full of life,
so beautiful in its simplicity,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Death By Rhymes
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 26th October 2020 @ 10:39:48 PM AEST
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This was great. You were feisty then too.
The best poems just flow without a care where they go...you know? |
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