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The Butterflies
Contributed by
mmiss
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Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 01:03:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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they showed up in my tummy
the same day I met you
They fluttered about there
made me feel you'd be true
Each time our eyes met
I'd feel them move
A touch on my face
is all you had to do
Then one day I noticed
they were not there
Why did they leave
My tummy's so bare
I miss the butterflies
Wish they were here
I miss you too
but you made them dissappear
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mmiss
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2005-07-14 01:03:17]
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Re: The Butterflies
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by poisonpen00ad on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 09:50:15 AM AEST
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Re: The Butterflies
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 09:02:57 PM AEST
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This poem was so simplistic yet so very much was said. Oh I have to quote, I have to!
"I miss the butterflies
Wish they were here
I miss you too
but you made them dissappear"
Does it get any more honest than that? I truly enjoyed, felt and wanted to read more of this poem.
The only word that really stood out was "dissappear" because I noticed it was misspelled. That is truly a minor thing.
I think we all miss the butterflies when they are gone. Yet, we remember them..
Kie
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