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Contributed by
aplsdka
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Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 12:57:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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Sometimes at night
When i can't fall asleep
I'll look at the light
Of the buildings and streets
Red of Stop,
Green of Go,
Yellow Slow.
White lights of streets
blinking red light cars,
Blinking white light too.
Blue of ice rinks,
Purple of theaters,
Yellow of the hills,
White commercial.
Then i look up,
and all i see
is a blackish blue fog
with the occasional speck
What a shame it is,
The lights in the sky,
are blocked from view
by the ones on the earth
Copyright ©
aplsdka
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2005-07-14 00:57:12]
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Re: stars
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by trini on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 02:30:09 AM AEST
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very nice write. no offence, but the middle seemed like it needed a bit more.
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Re: stars
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 03:04:22 AM AEST
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Not bad at all.
I say for a beginner your very talented .
keep writing. |
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Re: stars
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by aplsdka on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 04:26:16 PM AEST
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| yeah, the middle needed more. Actually, i wrote this much better once, but i lost the paper. If i find it i'll post that one |
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Re: stars
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by paul_x_walker on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 09:45:44 PM AEST
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| your getting better then me good job ashley |
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