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Sum1 tell me
Contributed by
hockeygurl
on
Friday, 10th January 2003 @ 05:20:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Searched so long
cant seem to find
sum1 whose heart
will defy their mind.
thoughts in the way
love cant get through
living life alone
isnt easy to do.
sum1 help me
i cant wait any longer
inside me's a need
inside theres a hunger
so what comes now?
i need to know
before my heart grows
to be colder than snow.
before my life is done
i need to find out
if love really is
what life's all about
Sum1 tell me
what i should do
cuz living alone
isnt easy 4 me to do
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hockeygurl
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2003-01-10 05:20:00]
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Re: Sum1 tell me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 10th January 2003 @ 05:29:32 AM AEST
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I enjoyed this poem very much...so sweet and simple..tho a bit sad...
Jenni |
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Re: Sum1 tell me
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by darkeyedman on
Tuesday, 21st January 2003 @ 07:30:35 PM AEST
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| i liked this more than i thought i would, and enough to chance making a suggestion. at the very end you might consider changing 'isn't easy 4 me to do' to 'isn't easy to do. i only suggest this because i really liked the flow up to that point, and the extra words hurt the flow. at any rate, change or not, its a good poem. jim |
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Re: Sum1 tell me
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by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 23rd February 2003 @ 03:27:35 PM AEST
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| i really, really like this...well done... |
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