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I'd keep her tears together
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:04:10 AM in AEST
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i would marry marigolds
if smiles were forever
i'd carry heavy clouds
to keep her tears together
i'd hand her roses red
to see her smile wide
if thorns wore hate instead
i'd cut the stem inside
through the light of trees
i saw a silhouette
or was it just a memory
of my heart's regret
nonetheless it's fun
to paint her in my mind
with her wings around a sun
and smiles not hard to find...
dw
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:08:12 AM AEST
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The title said, "READ ME". And, of course I did.
The second stanza was my favorite and overall I adored this poem.
I got hung up slightly on "to see her smile wide". Other than that, which is a minor thing, I really really really liked this poem.
Kie :) |
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by liquidsunshine on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:39:51 AM AEST
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How endearing. Your words are simple but profound and they capture the idea beautifully. Well done.
Love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 11:13:18 AM AEST
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| Agrees with kie...thisis a great write! I really enjoyed it |
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 12:15:37 PM AEST
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This is absolutely heavenly!! What a beautiful, emotive write...
"I'd carry heavy clouds to keep her tears together..."
AND
"If thorns wore hate instead I'd cut the stem inside..."
This is an excellent write Dwayne...Your poems get better and better each time...Keep it up...great job!
Scorp. |
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 04:00:50 PM AEST
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Beautiful write. |
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Re: I'd keep her tears together
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by TaraHill on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 05:57:42 PM AEST
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| Hey you...this was great... |
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